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timeshift · Greenhorn Joined: 31 Jan 2012 Posts: 3

Feedback on my arg

**Posted:** Tue Jan 31, 2012 5:53 pm

OhWhatProvidence

It seems good, but the first thing that made me almost not want to read all of it was the spelling errors. I guess they could be clues, some ARGs do that, but if this guy worked in a lab for so long, he should be able to spell, punctuate and capitalize correctly. The story seems original, but I'm not sure how you'd pull it off, so that's really enticing. The codes should have a purpose, like, is he hiding secrets with them or what? [I haven't tried to crack them, I'm just giving you first looks] A lot of ARGs sometimes use codes for the sake of codes, you know? It could be that that code has taken over the English language, or it could be binary so it's used more than English because the world is so high-tech or something? Maybe a bit more info on the framing device, it seems a bit shaky. I'd say, at this point, just get someone to proofread for you and work out the rest later. I like it!
Happy PMing! Very Happy

**Posted:** Wed Feb 01, 2012 8:50 pm

timeshift · Greenhorn Joined: 31 Jan 2012 Posts: 3

Thank you

**Posted:** Wed Feb 08, 2012 9:48 pm

batmanreborn · Boot Joined: 20 Aug 2011 Posts: 13

I would say I am very impressed with all the puzzle style work put into this, and I think my team could help you take this to a whole new level. None of the smaller issues critiqued would be a problem any longer. Id like you to come with us into The AlterNET.

I sent you a PM

**Posted:** Thu Feb 09, 2012 7:00 am

Tharol

People check got broken links.

**Posted:** Thu Feb 09, 2012 2:53 pm